A Winter Landscape
By Sara Kendrick, United States and Jack Horne, England
a southern winter
landscape framed by dark gray clouds
pines sigh mellow tunes
a small boy laughs as he runs
splashing in muddy puddles
white ice spews from ground
as temperature plummets
peach blossoms turn brown
a gray haired man shakes his head
and buys tulips for his wife
a spring bouquet sits
in a lovely vase gone dry
tulip petals fall
a kitten smashes the vase
and leaps from the windowsill
grandmother awakes
a small boy and his kitten
run outside to play
donning a yellow rain coat
against the winter landscape
pines sigh mellow tunes
a small boy laughs as he runs
splashing in muddy puddles
white ice spews from ground
as temperature plummets
peach blossoms turn brown
a gray haired man shakes his head
and buys tulips for his wife
a spring bouquet sits
in a lovely vase gone dry
tulip petals fall
a kitten smashes the vase
and leaps from the windowsill
grandmother awakes
a small boy and his kitten
run outside to play
donning a yellow rain coat
against the winter landscape
Sara and Jack,
ReplyDeleteA very nice collaboration poem!
Yours truly,
David Fox
Thanks so much for your encouraging comments..Sara
DeleteEnjoyed the read,Sara and Jack! A well written collaborative poem.All the best, Gert
ReplyDeleteYour reading and taking time to comment is so uplifting.
DeleteDisappointed that the poem didn't lead anywhere; it left me looking for more.You both kept the same verse shape which is encouraging. Sorry if this sounds negative. Until the next one!
ReplyDeleteRalph.
Maybe the next time we can lead you to join the little boy into a muddy puddle..Thanks for dropping by and taking time to comment..Sara
DeleteDear U.S. Citizen Sara and English Jack, I like the fact
ReplyDeleteit stuck to the title "Winter Landscape. I loved the
people animal painted pictures of this Poem.
Refreshing writing.
Yancy
Thanks so much for reading and giving your thoughts about the work. The cold wet scene did not daunt the little boy's spirit..Sara
DeleteYes, I enjoyed his splashing in muddy puddles
DeleteYancy
Little boys do love that mud and some grown men..Sara
DeleteDear Sara and Jack,
ReplyDeleteReally like the way your treated your theme of Winter Landscape. As spring approaches your poem bids a fond farewell to that season as it opens the door for spring to take up residence.
Thank you,
Michael
Spring has sprung here with summer warmth hanging onto the apron strings..Sara.Thanks for dropping by and for including us in this part of Whispers..
DeleteIf I can feel the atmosphere in a poem, than it's a good one.
ReplyDeleteThis poem makes the scenery vivid. Congrats poets
Daginne, Thanks for your visit to our work..I appreciate you taking time to read and comment..Your encouraging comments..Sara
DeleteThanks to everyone for their kind comments & thank you to Sara for writing with me
ReplyDeleteJack, Thanks for writing with me..It was an interesting endeavour..Sara
Deleteit's beautiful!
ReplyDeleteYour comment is uplifting..Sara
DeleteDear Sara and Jack,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing this poem with its interesting perspective. I appreciate the joy you are at whispers and in the writing community at large.
Blessings always,
Karen
Thanks for the invitation to join the group..I enjoy reading other writers..Sara
DeleteI like how you wrote this poem in flashes of imagery, Sara and Jack. The ending is a subtle attempt at nudging our own imagination. Best regards // paul
ReplyDeletePaul,I am so glad that you like our flashes of imagery. I hope your imagination filled with great ideas..Sara
DeleteI really enjoyed this a lot, thanks for sharing it with us.
ReplyDeletePeggy, It was a delight to write..Sara..Thanks for stopping by..
DeletePLAYFUL, SURPRISING--DUN WORK. I like the wonderful (clear and detailed parallel structure in the first 3 stanzas (the grey/dark/cold frame set in 1st 2 lines, the movement into activity and "blooming"in the remainder of each stanza, and the graceful way the whole poem parallels that one-stanza structure by the "rebirth" movement in the 4th stanza. It is like the poem says "no" to death--and very effectively. Great job!
ReplyDeleteAhh!! Your comment is so appropriately fitting for the poem. I appreciate your stopping by. Sara
ReplyDeleteDear Sara,
ReplyDeleteThis a lovely poem, well-done by you and Jack. Good use of imagery to share your thoughts in this wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing it for us to read.
Blessings and best wishes,
Karen