Tuesday, February 24, 2015

The Crying Candle--By Jan Allison--United Kingdom

The Crying Candle

I called my son... he said you were fading
The candle seemed to call my name
I watched its brightly flickering flame
The light from it shone bright in the dark
I was hypnotised by its golden glow
The wax melted slowly, so slowly
Like creamy liquid tears running down the sides
Drip, drip, drip, a silent puddle formed
Slowly, oh so gradually over time the wick decreased
Almost like your life was ebbing away
Getting smaller and weaker every second
The candle flame started to dim
Flickering, dancing, flickering, dancing
Fighting to stay alive with every ounce of its strengthen
Finally it flickers for the final time
It gave its final breath
Leaving a wisp of smoke
I imagined it was your spirit rising through the air
Ascending towards heaven

Jan Allison is a relative newcomer to poetry. She didn’t start writing poetry until her husband was diagnosed with prostate cancer and underwent surgery at the end of 2013. She wrote her first poem ‘Splendid Isolation’ whilst he was in hospital. Since then has discovered a love of poetry and has written over 500 poems. Jan also wrote collaboratively with her writing partner Darren Watson under the name Jadazzle United.


  1. Hello, Jan. For being a newcomer to poetry I love how your pen flows throughout the picture you paint with your words and thoughts. Writing is a most wonderful and therapeutic way to heal from some of life's hard blows and the results are doubly beneficial in the healing! A joy to read you! Sherii

  2. Dear Jan,

    I agree with Sheri. It's so good to see you already have a comment on your wonderful poem. Welcome to Whispers! I hope you enjoy your time spent here. Please let me know if you have any questions. Best wishes with all your writing endeavors.


  3. Hi Jan! I love this poem which I am sure could easily be referring to a most beloved one who passed away very recently. It shows the ebbing strength(en) that finally ends with the spirit rising to heaven. All the best. // paul

  4. Jan, welcome to Whispers. I know you will enjoy your time spent here. Everyone is so wonderful. Thank you for such a lovely poem that describes the passing of a loved one so well. Watching that final flicker of light go out is difficult to say the least. The world is left a darker with the passing of a loved one.. I really appreciated your talent in this well written poem easily related to.

  5. Hie Jan,

    Welcome to Whispers. Its already wonderful to have you. Beautiful poem. Thanks for sharing your poem. Had a nice mind moment reading it over and over again.

    Andrew Ntchindi Jere

  6. Wonderful. Very nice poem, Jan. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing and continued blessings!

    -MJ (www.tgbtgpublictions.com)

  7. An elegant piece of writing, reading down the page, like a diminishing candle. A touching poem in many respects. Thank you for sharing your words. Ralph

  8. Jan,
    Wow! 500 poems in probably less than 2 years. That is astonishing. This poem is wonderful. Welcome to Whispers!
    Your new friend,
    David Fox