Wednesday, March 12, 2014

Domestic Scene--By David Austin--United States

Domestic Scene

by the alley
paint bare and splintered
this leaning    green fence
inside    safe in their garden
two old women chattering

David Austin is professional violinist and teacher, who communicates through poetry. He has played with the Cincinnati Symphony, taught at Colorado College and various public schools. He is a published author, who has been writing poetry and novels for over 40 years. His pride and joy is a shelter in which he feeds and cares for animals.  David is a member of Poetry Soup.


  1. Your poem is a wonderful "word art folk painting" and the imagery is perfect and perfectly clear. You've taken what perhaps might have been considered a humble and boring routine and have successfully highlighted with words " folk art" - Sheri

  2. I could well envision these scene. I could also imagine the happy talk the two old women were having about the lovely flowers in the garden. It brought joy to my heart. Thank you for a well written poem. I loved it.

  3. Dear Daver, How ironic that Sandra and I just finished reading a book called "Two Old Women." You paint a touching portrait of women enjoying each other's company, even as the fence needs repair. As we get older, such things seem trivial. It is the companionship we cherish most. Love it and love you, my friend. Carolyn

  4. Short but sweet, loved the visuals well done. best wishes. Peter Dome.

  5. Dear Daver,

    Loved the imagery in your poem as you describe the two women enjoying each others company. Great visual! As Sheri said " word art folk painting" really defines this poem.
    Thanks for sharing your work with us,

    Sandra Stefanowich

  6. Thank you, Robert Dufresne, for the following comment--

    Just as soon as I started reading this one Daver.. your little movie started in my head. I gotta admit... I wasn't thinking flower talk. heh heh ..more like gossip. thanks for the free video Daver. I've missed you my friend. long time since Poetry soup God bless

    Bob D

  7. Tis still a good one Daver, my friend. After reading Bob's comment, I wonder if the fence is leaning in to eavesdrop.


  8. Thank you, Jack Horne, for the following comment--

    very much enjoyed this tender scene

  9. Hi David. Beautiful, relational poem. I really enjoyed it. Continued blessings!

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