Dear Whispers’ family,
The July Activity was “Captivating Titles.” Writers were asked to come up with a title
for this poem:
light and dark hands
flow over
black and white keys
little girls’ harmony—
love and peace
I have narrowed the choices down to 3—
Pianissimo—By Raamesh Gowri Raghavan--India
Ivories of Serenity—By Sandra Stefanowich—Canada
In One Accord—By Jane Richer--Canada
*Update--9/15--In thinking about this more, I think it would be a more growing experience if readers would comment on each title and how it interacts with the poem.
If you, shared an untitled poem for this activity, it would
be nice to hear if you selected one of the suggestions from our readers. Please post your poem again with your choice
for title
May you travel with the gift of words, lighting the way for
others that are inspired by your talent. I am so grateful to work with
wonderful writers that have hearts of kindness.
Blessings and best wishes,
Karen
Whispers’ Editor
Karen,
ReplyDeleteI like Sandra's title for this poem. Thanks for allowing us to choose it.
Your friend,
David Fox
Dear David,
DeleteThank you so much for sharing your choice of titles for this poem. I've never had a competition-type of activity as it is not really in keeping with my vision for Whispers.
Hi Everyone,
Instead of choosing one title--I would like readers to reflect on how each title works with the poem. This offers an opportunity to reflect on how important titles are in conveying ideas, luring readers in and presenting an artistic experience from start to finish. I hope you don't mind me changing my mind.
Blessings to you all,
Karen
I like Pianissmo. It has a child like quality of a made up word. It is also a little undefined. It suggests virtuoso. Do children know the impact if their words or playing? (piano).
ReplyDeleteIn one Accord has a good pun of chord. Unified and peaceful.
Ivories of Serenity sounds too grown up! Good flow like music and half rhyme which I like. It sums the poem up, then they all do!
A great selection. Well done. Hope my comments are fair and helpful, and what is sought.
Ralph.
Dear Ralph,
DeleteThank you for your insightful analysis of these titles--and oops!--I did make a typo in Pianissimo. Sorry, Raamesh, I have it corrected thanks to Ralph's good eyes. You might want to consider firing the editor. But then, you would have to take her place. I appreciate all you do for this writing community.
Many blessings,
Karen
Pianissimo musically means quiet does this apply to this beautiful poem perhaps In one accord could well be applied to this poem as they are both in tune with each other but I too think Ivories of serenity is most suited as the title to this little gem of a poem!
ReplyDeleteHi George, could be a typo. The title hasn't the extra I for Pianissimo, (Pianissmo) which is indeed playing softly, (if spelt with the extra I).
DeleteRalph.
I think it is a typo on Raamesh's Part Ralph!
ReplyDeleteHi George and Ralph,
DeleteThanks for adding a little humor to ye ole editor's blunder. Raamesh had it right. I'm learning that I'm more human each and every day. George, thank you for your analysis of these titles. They are all good.
Blessings.
The title "In One Accord" best appears to reflect the meaning and message of this poem. In fact I had in mine "Unison's Tune". Regards // paul
ReplyDeleteDear Paul,
ReplyDeleteThank you for your creative perspective and for providing another title to me to ponder about. Thank you for your ongoing support and encouragement, my friend.
Blessings,
Karen