Goodbyes
By Michael Todd, Lynn DeVrieze, Christopher Mitchell, Donna Brumback Nalley and
DeAnna Metcalf
The hardest goodbyes are the ones not heard;
Come from the heart to land who knows where.
Spoken in plain sentences, word for word...
As though I had one goodbye left to spare.
I have a heavy heart, but empty hands.
Such a simple phrase, I'm unable to say.
Through my broken hourglass slips the sand,
My farewell falls somewhere along the way.
As I stare along the empty road south,
Imagining the departing Greyhound empty;
Only quiet breath leaving my mouth,
And tears falling toward flowers pretty.
The sweetest hellos are whispered by you
As our hearts meet to share a wordless song.
I know as we join in harmony true
That you’ve been missing from me far too long.
There are no words to quell the thirst
A drink of your soul can supply,
So hush the verbal notion first
And speak not, a needless goodbye.
Wow, it seems that you all are in synch. You all have handled this situation with beauty. I loved reading this tremendous piece. Great job.
ReplyDeleteIt was fun to do. Pulled me a little out of my comfort zone.
DeleteThanks so much, Rusty. Glad you enjoyed this.
DeleteWhat a joy it is to get together with friends to write in thyme, and have things come together, then see our poem on the pages of Whispers...
ReplyDeleteThanks so much to Lynn, Christopher, Donna and DeAnna for all their thoughts and words, and I should say, it was Christopher that sparked the idea for the topic here.
And all because a draft of a short story wasn't working.
DeleteFunny how inspiration works, how an idea weaves its way to fruition. :)
DeleteDear Michael, Lynn, Christopher, Donna and DeAnna,
DeleteThank you for sharing your wonderful poem with us. I invite Lynn, Christopher, Donna and DeAnna to share individual poems too. It's so good to have all of you a part of our growing online journal/poetry community. Please let me know if you have any questions.
Blessings,
Karen
Thank you, Karen, for this format and venue, and letting us all be a part of it for a time.
DeleteFantastic collab poem from five very talented poets! Good to read Lynn's, DeAnna's and Christopher's poetic abilities again! And Donna! I have never viewed her poetic genius until now; excellent! Oh, I almost left out Michael..what praise can I offer that I haven't said before? The whole poem flowed flawless!
ReplyDeleteHey, Brother Dave... Nice to see you in the house. This was an enjoyable venture for us. I am thrilled to see the results here.
DeleteOh I saw this in the making! Awesome!
ReplyDeleteIt was so fun to see it in motion, Alba Leigh. Thanks for coming by to be with us.
DeleteLovely poem! And so many of you to have written it in absolute sync!!
ReplyDeleteI suppose everyone has experienced "Goodbye Syndrome" along life's way.
DeleteThanks for your very kind overview, sheikha. It is greatly appreciated.
Miichael,
ReplyDeleteThis one took my breath away! Wow! A warm welcome to Lynn, Christopher, Donna and DeAnna! I hope you all will submit more.
Your friend,
David Fox
Thanks, David, for your warm reception extended to my friends.
DeleteNice! I clicked, you know, just to see what new collaboration was here and when my eyes found the first word, they glided over the rest, stanza to stanza seamlessly. Really deep, despite the seeming simplicity. Beautiful! The stories our goodbyes!
ReplyDeleteAnd done by so MANY poets! How did you all find the sync to ensure it flowed this well while having a group of lovely lines altogether?
I officially think now, that the collaborative poems are about the best on Whispers. They never disappoint. Well done and thanks, Michael, Lynn, Christopher, Donna and DeAnna! Phew! That was a handful! :)
Su'eddie
(http://sueddie.wordpress.com)
Su'eddie... I spent an entire year writing nothing but collabs with others. It can be a fun and rewarding experience, from concept, to writing to seeing the finished piece. I am happy your enjoyed this one.
DeleteI loved the spontaneity of this poem. I had intended to add my verse to it and then got interrupted and didn't get back to it. You all did a wonderful write here..This is a really good example of collaboration spontaneity
ReplyDeleteStormy
It would have been epic had you joined in, Clarice. You do as much collabing as anyone I know, these days... Thanks for visiting.
DeleteWonderful write!
ReplyDelete~~DJ
Thank you very much, Diana.
DeleteIt's been such a long time since I've read collaborative works, and the writers here have shown how beautiful and seamless collabs can be. This is one for the history books. Goodbyes are so difficult, but this poem is beautiful :)
ReplyDeleteI was really hoping you would enjoy this one, Dahlia. You and I have done a few of these... Now, I am going to go fly a balloon. :)
DeleteWell, that made me smile :)
Deletea lovely weaving of words,by so many! loved it! here in the UK, the 'empty greyhound' adds a special farewell nostalgia,immortalIsed perhaps by Simon/Garfunkel's earlier collaborations. great job. look forward to more! Ralph.
ReplyDeleteI am overwhelmed by your generous overview, Ralph. Many thank yous, Sir.
DeleteI am overwhelmed by your generous overview, Ralph. Many thank yous, Sir.
DeleteHello Everyone. Wonderful collaboration on this poem. Heartfelt & enjoyable read! Inspiring thoughts put into words! Best wishes to all of you, Chris~
ReplyDeleteMany thanks, Chris... Nice to see you, as always.
DeleteWow. A nice collaboration by all five of you. I really enjoyed it. Thank you all for sharing and continued blessings!
ReplyDelete-MJ(www.tgbtgpublictions.com)
If you're happy, Maurice, we're happy... Thank you!
DeleteA truly wonderful collaboration by all of you. Amazing the seamlessness of the poem as though it were written by one person. What a joy to read this this evening. Thank you for sharing your wonderful talents.
ReplyDeleteCharlene
Very happy you enjoyed this, Charlene. Thank you.
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