Looking at Fall
“Looks like fall, don’t it?” and the old eyes scanned the sky...
Black billows of some snow clouds were scudding quickly by
And silently on tapered wing a brown hawk cut the air,
Gliding on the cold, brisk wind, freed from all earthly care.
The old man’s eyes took in the muted colors of the trees;
Stark against the sky they stood, now nearly bare of leaves.
Frost had touched the flowers, and fields of corn stood brown,
Though here and there a golden maple wore a crimson crown.
“Yep, sure does,” I answered, but my mind surged on ahead
To winter with its snow and cold which I so deeply dread.
“Live for today,” then comes to mind, and who said it was wise
And so I join the old man as his eyes still sweep the skies.
Jean, at 80, has been writing poems since she was 18. For 25 years she published a popular poetry quarterly of up to 100 pages, with a subscribership of nearly 500. Illness in 1986 ended the magazine. She currently publishes, by email, a 2-page monthly of clean humor. Contact her at jcalkins01@charter.net.
Fascinating poem... I thought the line breaks were serve as a distraction, but that was never the case. The pauses were a plus... This piece is a sweeping success.
ReplyDeleteDear Jean, I thoroughly enjoyed this fantastic poem. Your talent is evident and I am so glad you have chosen to share it with us on Whispers. I was quite enamored with the breaks that causes one to ponder the words more deeply. Quite an interesting form of poetry. Is there a name for it?
ReplyDeleteLove, Charlene
Love the visuals Jean. a really great write. well done. Pete.
ReplyDeleteHi, Jean. Interesting format and, of course, great subject, too. Line breaks could almost pass as two poems in one and would be a super format for collaborations, don't you think so? Thanks for sharing your creativity! Sheri / www.poetryandbeyond.net
ReplyDeleteThank you, Jack Horne, for the following--
ReplyDeleteJean - Yes, living for today is very wise (today, I'm 'enjoying' sweeping up the leaves at work, ha ha). Beautiful piece
Ah, those seasonal poems just warm my heart. Thank you for sharing this, Jean. I also like the unique format. Continued blessings!
ReplyDelete-MJ (www.tgbtgpublictions.com)
This poem is great.
ReplyDeleteCongratulation and thanks for sharing it.