Pit with a Bottom
In halcyon days long past,
when starry eyes scanned the sky,
Dave looked down on ditch diggers.
Now, he thinks they’re seasoned pros--
shoveling dirt in rhythmic scoops,
while his life’s long lacked a flow.
Dave envies those who work
in dawn’s blossoming sunshine
or rain or even blinding snow,
because pitch black concrete walls
have closed in on him for decades.
Dave hates those who get paid
for creating grave like trenches,
while his heart and soul are bankrupt,
entombed in a self made grave.
But now, Dave has new idols,
and he’s determined to be
the best ditch digger ever.
Richard Sponaugle was born 4-20-60 in Maryland and raised in Northern Virginia. He received a BA from George Mason University. A prolific poet and songwriter, he has been published in many venues.
Richard, I found this poem to be well-written, interesting and different Quite a good write!
ReplyDeleteI love how resolve was reached, in the very early going, and for the remainder of the poem, was driven home. Very unique style and splendid content, Richard.
ReplyDeleteRichard, there should be a box that reads WOW. I loved it! I could relate so well on a spiritual level. Changing ones focus has all the world to do with ones outlook on life. Your poem is unique and well written. Thank you for sharing your talent with us here on Whispers.
ReplyDeleteCharlene
Richard. I think you’ve fashioned this piece with a neat balance of ambition, experience and perspective. The contrast of physical and metaphorical holes is a nice idea to explore.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing
David
Wow, love the subject. To me, this job would require an expert because of all the liability that is there.............. Very interesting poem......... Sheri
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the texture of life
Thanks for your poem
Very interesting, Richard. As usual, nice job. Thanks for sharing and continued blessings!
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Hi Everyone,
ReplyDeleteThank you for all the wonderful comments on Rick's powerful poem. I will send your comments to him. Congratulations, Rick, on the success of this one! Wishing you the best with all your writing endeavors my friend.
Blessings,
Karen