Sunday, May 17, 2015

Special Feature Collaborative Poem--By Nalini Priyadarshni--India and D. Russel Michener--United States

Just Before Dawn: A Sedoka

By and Nalini Priyadarshni and D. Russel Micnhimer

Aspen glow reflects
Your warmth upon my face, add
Streak of love to my dusk

Your beams reach me far
away though I maybe, your
rich warmth always near

Distance just measures
How far and swift love travels
I exhale breaths you inspire

Inhaling your joy
Awakens my sleeping bliss
Each dawn a new dream shines bright

You fondly burnish
Pieces of my existence
Nurture me to flowering

Polishing edges
Buffing your glistening joy
To shimmering reflections

Light of our loving
Unlock enchanting visions
Sweet symphony to twain souls

Focus of living
Shining key to ecstasy
Opens all chests of treasures
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27 comments:

  1. UnknownMay 17, 2015 at 12:30 PM

    Nalini and D Russel, you two share collaborative minds that seem melded together! A fun and beautiful read this morning! Sheri

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    1. Goddess Of Small ThingsMay 18, 2015 at 5:19 AM

      Delighted to see that you enjoyed the poem as much as we enjoyed writing it. Thank you She Sta. Nalini

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  2. angeleeMay 17, 2015 at 1:06 PM

    http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/sedoka.html
    http://www.britannica.com/EBchecked/topic/532334/sedoka
    http://allpoetry.com/column/8927011-Introduction-to-the-sedoka-and-mondo.-by-Andrew-Hide

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    1. Goddess Of Small ThingsMay 18, 2015 at 5:22 AM

      Thank you for the references. Russel and I have written a few Mondo also but they are longer pieces. Nalini

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  3. AnonymousMay 17, 2015 at 1:09 PM

    Congratulations on a beautiful collaboration! -Laura

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  4. UnknownMay 17, 2015 at 1:25 PM

    Nalini and Russel,
    A great collaboration. Your voices work well together in this poem.
    Your new friend,
    David Fox

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  5. Karen O'LearyMay 17, 2015 at 1:28 PM

    Dear Nalini and Russel,

    What a joy to see all these comments on your wonderful poem. So glad to have both of your sharing your words for Whispers. Welcome!!!! Let me know if you have any questions. Best wishes with all your writing endeavors.

    Blessings,
    Karen

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    1. Goddess Of Small ThingsMay 18, 2015 at 5:16 AM

      Thank you so much Karen for publication and this wonderful space you have created for poetry. So glad to be part of this vibrant community. Nalini

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  6. RhymetimebluezBlogMay 17, 2015 at 7:03 PM

    You have really captured some very special moments wwith these verses. Well done you two!

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  7. UnknownMay 17, 2015 at 9:41 PM

    You both have captured the essence of love within your lines. I really enjoyed reading this awesome poem this evening. I hope to read more collaborations between you both.

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    1. Goddess Of Small ThingsMay 18, 2015 at 5:14 AM

      We have written several pieces and would be glad to share. Thank you so much Rusty. Nalini

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  8. sheikha !May 17, 2015 at 10:54 PM

    You write amazing poems together!

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  9. Sara KendrickMay 18, 2015 at 9:12 AM

    Very romantic collaborative work..I enjoyed reading the warmth of love penned in these lines..It was well written and very expressive..Sara

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    1. Twilight MusingsMay 25, 2015 at 10:32 AM

      Thank you so much Sara...glad you enjoyed....Nalini

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  10. CharleneMay 18, 2015 at 11:59 AM

    Your collaborative efforts with this poem is supremely lovely. Love from a distance seems enhanced with such expressive words. Indeed, absence seems to have made your hearts grow fonder in this poem.. Thank you for sharing your talents with all of us.
    Charlene

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    1. Twilight MusingsMay 25, 2015 at 10:34 AM

      Delighted by your thoughtful comment. Thank you so much Charlene....Nalini

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  11. pdfrenchMay 18, 2015 at 3:47 PM

    Nice work!

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  12. UnknownMay 19, 2015 at 6:03 AM

    You two write seamlessly, it is hard to tell who wrote what line. A really great achievement. I look forward to seeing more of your work. Robert

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    1. Twilight MusingsMay 25, 2015 at 10:39 AM

      Katauta in italics has been written by Russel whereas the others have been written by me. I am so glad you enjoyed reading it as much as we enjoyed writing it....Nalini

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  13. paul callusMay 19, 2015 at 9:38 AM

    Excellent collaboration, Nalini & Russel! Impressed by how you cleverly built one stanza on to another. Love flows across the miles! // paul

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    1. Twilight MusingsMay 25, 2015 at 10:39 AM

      Much gratitude Paul for this lovely comment....Nalini

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  14. AnonymousMay 26, 2015 at 1:15 PM

    Congrats By Nalini Priyadarshni and D. Russel Michener. What a wonderful collaboration. I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing and continued blessings!

    -MJ (www.tgbtgpublictions.com)

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