Friday, March 11, 2016

Special Feature Collaborative Poem--By Gautam Nadkarni, Dr. Brijesh Raj, Raamesh Gowri Raghavan, Lt. Cdr. Paresh Tiwari and Rohini Gupta--India

bittersweet the mogras

By Gautam Nadkarni, Dr. Brijesh Raj, Raamesh Gowri Raghavan, Lt. Cdr. Paresh Tiwari and Rohini Gupta

coffee shop —
the flavour of her voice
in every sip 
bittersweet the mogras
sold by the schoolgirl   
lingering over
the evening rush hour —
summer sun      
bleeding from the barbed wire
the coat you wore last winter

nothing left behind
except that last
I step into the morrow
of my dreams     
from the tulip garden
stolen petals
and kisses

bridal veil the colour
of magic on her lips   

with cross stitches
we add a full moon
to the night sky   
sketched in pen and ink
the group all smiles

This 25-line poem is arranged in two cycles. Verses 1 & 6 are by Gautam Nadkarni, verses 2 & 7 by Dr. Brijesh Raj, verses 3 & 8 by Raamesh Gowri Raghavan verses 4 & 9 by Lt. Cdr. Paresh Tiwari and verses 5 & 10 by Rohini Gupta. Though we didn't intend it at the start, the sequence evolved into a ballad-like narrative of young love won and lost in the tumult of war, and then moving on to the rediscovery of a more mature, revitalising love.


  1. Directives got out in all directions, only to steadfastly come full circle, meeting... no, surpassing the narrative.

    Excellent compilation!

  2. A beautiful collaborative poem, I loved it! Thank you so much for sharing!

  3. Congratulations to Rohini Gupta , Gautam Nadkarni, Dr. Brijesh Raj, Raamesh Gowri Raghavan,and Paresh Tiwari on a fine collaborative poem.With best wishes,to you all and many thanks to Karen for sharing such fresh work angelee

  4. Everyone,
    You all did a fabulous job! Welcome to Gautam and Brijesh to Whispers!
    Your new friend,
    David Fox

  5. This poem is so tight it seems that one of you wrote it! Love, "with cross stiches/we add a full moon/to the night sky." Wonderful addition to the collaboration narrative.

  6. A collaboration like this is a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing. Nalini

  7. Thank you all at Whispers, Karen and to you David for the warm welcome. Collaborating for this one was a spur of the moment writing itch. We decided to just let it evolve and see...and enjoyed it thoroughly.
    warm regards

    1. Dear Brijesh and all your writing partners,

      Thank you for sharing this wonderful collaborative poem that our readers are sure enjoying. Welcome to you and Gautam! I hope you, both, will consider sending an individual poem submission some time soon. Another collaborative poem for next month would be a joy to receive too. Best wishes and happy writing!


  8. Thank you both for sharing your well written poem!

  9. This is a master class! Wow....shame you had to stop! Poetry power house. Well done. Will look out for your individual work. Ralph

  10. What a fantastic bit of writing here. Your images are so vivid, and one feels as if they are right there.
    So glad you are here.

  11. haiku poets have played with their imagination to their best. The reader has to play with them on his own to complete. A play in progress-