Thursday, April 10, 2014

Haiku--By Rita Odeh--Israel

cloudy morning-
a kite flies higher
than its string
_______________

that full moon-
a coin falls into
the beggar's palm
_______________

distant gunfire-
ivy leaves creep along
the old ruins
_______________

wailing wall-
the priest leans against
his own shadow
_______________

moonless sky-
military raincoats hung
on a bamboo fence
_______________

Rita Odeh is the author of seven books, including Buds of Dream which will be released May 2014 and will be available from Amazon. Her haiku and haiga have been honored with many awards. To read more of her poems, please go to Catching the Moment, http://rita-odeh.blogspot.com
Posted by at

22 comments:

  1. Chen-ou Liu, 劉鎮歐April 11, 2014 at 6:12 AM

    Hi! Rita:

    A string of little gems.

    I particularly like the last haiku in which the zoom-in technique is effectively employed.

    L1 successfully sets the emotive context while Ls 2&3 open up an interpretative space for the reader's emotions and reflection -- what's left unsaid (such as violence implied in "military raincoats" and separation indicated in "fence") is more significant than what's stated.


    Chen-ou

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Rita OdehApril 12, 2014 at 12:29 PM

      I am very thankful to you for taking the time to write me your feedback, Chen-ou.
      Haiku is an interesting genre because it requires an active reader who has to dig the unsaid. Your feedback completed my image and added another layer to it. I enjoyed reading your skilled analysis of the symbols. Thank you so much.





      Delete
  2. Lisa DApril 11, 2014 at 6:22 AM

    I love haiku, Rita. And these are brilliant! So much said in so few words. Well done! Lisa

    ReplyDelete
  3. UnknownApril 11, 2014 at 10:03 AM

    Hi, there, Rita - good to read your super Haiku here on Whispers! I love them all, they stimulate good visuals and imagery and leave lasting impressions on the mind. Hope to read more of your writings! Sheri / www.poetryandbeyond.net

    ReplyDelete
  4. Karen O'LearyApril 11, 2014 at 11:26 AM

    Dear Rita,

    Welcome to Whispers! It is good to see that you already have received three lovely comments on your wonderful haiku. I hope you enjoy your time spent here. Let me know if you have any questions.

    Best wishes,
    Karen

    ReplyDelete
  5. UnknownApril 11, 2014 at 3:51 PM

    Excellent haiku, Rita. Each one has a memorable image. All are great and my favorites are the ones about the wailing wall and the full moon. Nice touch having it fall into the beggar's hand. Welcome to Whispers! Best wishes, Carolyn

    ReplyDelete
  6. CharleneApril 11, 2014 at 8:29 PM

    Welcome to Whispers and thank you Rita for these Haiku. They each were amazing. I particularly liked the wailing wall one. I will be happy to see more of your talent here.
    Love, Charlene

    ReplyDelete
  7. UnknownApril 12, 2014 at 12:08 AM

    I love this site with its international perspectives. I so enjoy your pieces. I have a soft spot for kites which took me higher still! Thank you for sharing them with us. Ralph.

    ReplyDelete
  8. Rita OdehApril 12, 2014 at 12:32 PM

    Thanks for your encouraging feedback, friends!
    I am proud to be a member of this warm family <3

    ReplyDelete
  9. Karen O'LearyApril 12, 2014 at 4:22 PM

    Thank you, Sara Kendrick, for the following comment--

    I received a special touch from each Haiku..

    Sara Kendrick

    ReplyDelete
  10. Rita OdehApril 13, 2014 at 12:53 AM

    I am humbly proud of your feedback, Sara.
    Thank you.

    Rita Odeh

    ReplyDelete
  11. AnonymousApril 14, 2014 at 2:47 AM

    Each image is evocative. I enjoy reading everyone of these, Rita.

    ReplyDelete
  12. Archana Kapoor NagpalApril 16, 2014 at 10:16 AM

    Each Haiku is thought provoking. I have always liked your work. In specific #1 is my favourite in your series.

    ReplyDelete
  13. AnonymousApril 18, 2014 at 1:13 PM

    Enjoyed your haiku, Rita. Continued blessings!

    -Maurice J. Reynolds, Owner / Editor
    TGBTG! Publications / Creative Inspirations
    www.tgbtgpublictions.com

    ReplyDelete
  14. Rita OdehApril 18, 2014 at 10:11 PM

    Thanks Maurice. I appreciate your encouraging feedback.

    ReplyDelete
  15. UnknownApril 20, 2014 at 4:31 PM

    Rita,
    I enjoyed your poetry. It is especially nice you live in Israel -- another country to add to Whispers' growing poetry map! Your haiku is stellar!
    Sincerely,
    David Fox

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Rita OdehMay 2, 2014 at 3:14 AM

      Thanks, David for your warm welcome and positive feedback which stimulates me to fly ...

      Rita

      Delete
  16. ichthysApril 23, 2014 at 8:29 AM

    Your fourth haiku Rita,captures the image so well and reminds me of our two trips to the Holy Land.Shalom Brian

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. Rita OdehMay 2, 2014 at 3:17 AM

      Hi Brian,
      Your feedback is the dew of my buds of haiku.
      Many thanks.

      Rita

      Delete
  17. Karen O'LearyMay 1, 2014 at 5:48 PM

    Thank you, Robert Dufresne, for the following comment--

    We are so fortunate to have poets with talent such as yours, Rita.
    Your poem filled me. Hard to put it down. You got me for sure.

    Loved and felt every word.

    Bob D.

    ReplyDelete
  18. Rita OdehMay 2, 2014 at 3:10 AM

    I am humbly honored by your encouraging feedback, Robert.
    Many thanks.

    Rita

    ReplyDelete
  19. Rita OdehMay 2, 2014 at 3:21 AM

    Dear friends, I am so proud of every feedback written here to me. Thanks for taking the time to guide my steps on the haiku path.

    Warmly,
    Rita

    ReplyDelete

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)