A Kiss Goodbye?
Cold metal trains pressing refrains on hard steel tracks,
racing ever, changing never the lyrics of clickity clack.
Loved ones scurrying, hurrying, never worrying,
that they may never be riding back,
in cold metal trains pressing refrains on hard steel tracks,
racing ever, changing never the lyrics of clickity clack.
Robert A. Dufresne was born in Vermont and raised on a dairy farm. After four years in the Navy and trying his hand at a couple of trades, he settled in as a self employed remodeling carpenter for 31 years. He and his wife moved to Florida in 1998, where he continued his career. He began writing poetry in 2009 .
Hi there, Robert. I don't know how I missed this one because I love to write about anything trains. I hear them at 2:00 am when I am finishing up an oil painting and I become inspired every time to write a poem or a song...... I love your poem because I can see there was a hint of a lonely goodbye somewhere in there and your poem ignites me. I am so proud and blessed to read you here on the Whispers platform! This is where one meets the nicest people and the best of writers, too! Sheri / www.poetryandbeyond.net
ReplyDeleteDear Rob,
ReplyDeleteWhat an amazing rhyme (even internal rhyme) and rhythm there is to this poem. It moves along as fast as a locomotive. Do you remember the folk song, "City of New Orleans"? Arlo Guthrie wrote it as a farewell to the days of train travel, but still there are new trains carrying passengers across the country. Guthrie sings, "Don't you know me? I'm your native son." Indeed, the train is America's own true contribution to the world of travel. Keep these wonderful writes coming, my friend!
Love to you and Gail,
Carolyn
Thank you, Jack Horne, for the following comment--
ReplyDeleteI could almost hear those sounds and imagine I was sitting in a train carriage as I read this one
Nice poem, Robert. I love the rhyme and flow. Creative imagery filled with mazes of mind-exploration. Thanks for sharing. Continued blessings!
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Thank you, Richard Sponaugle, for the following--
ReplyDeleteVery good use of language, says much with a few words, remind us of the constant uncertainty of life.