Windmills
By Jane Richer and Pam Murray
More and more we see Windmills used to power our life,
Rows and rows of turning blades each a whirling knife.
Sending cooling air through stagnant skies and polluted lands,
From atmospheric essences to fill our many demands.
Electrical power is all the craze we must keep machines in play,
Forget the damage that we do, making our world turn gray.
Faster, quicker, our world is spinning vastly out of control,
No one stopping to see Earth and pray for her precious soul.
Yes, we are turning like the windmill too busy to stop this spin,
Too caught up in the speed we seek, to remember the peace within.
To catch our breath, slow down, and realise-progress comes in stages,
Otherwise the book of life is missing too many pages.
For once 'torn' out, the next generation will have nothing left to save,
And Earth which was so glorious will become our desolate grave!
Thank you, Isha Wagner, for the following comment--
ReplyDelete"I love the sincerity of this poem. No doubt that it is expressing so well Jane and Pam's feelings for their environment and their concern for the next generation. The only thing is I personally do not agree with their conclusions but do concede they may well be right. Only time will tell."
Hi Isha, I am so glad that you liked our joint poem. To start with I had decided to write about Windmills and Pam liked that too. It took on a life of its own and suddenly we were not writing about simple Windmills but environmental struggles too! We loved the way it was developing and decided to just let go and write. We were amazed at the way it spun and twisted like a Windmill as if our minds were as one. Love Jane
DeleteJane and Pam, I wish we could go back to using horses and buggies. What we are doing to our planet is of great concern to many of us. Extraordinary poem with a very important message. Wish all the folks in Washington could read it too! Thanks for sharing it. Best wishes, Carolyn Devonshire
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately Carolyn we can't backtrack either. We have spread ourselves through family over most of this world and we either greet them by plane, train, bus or car. A horse and buggy was alright when families moved over only a small area, now we move to other countries, provinces or states, some areas that have immense mountain ranges or only have access by plane or boat. United States and Canada are wealthy compared to many places and yet we have people that are homeless, in need of food and clothing. This should not be, children should not go hungry or thirsty or not have access to medicine when needed. My grandson told me that he shared his lunch today with another child because his dad had no more food in the cupboards and just enough in the fridge for their supper. Damien told his teacher who spoke to the boy. She contacted her church that runs a bed and breakfast for the needy and now that family will be able to come there for warm clothing, food, supplies and any other support they might need including helping his dad to find work if need be. Love Jane
DeleteHello! Most certainly a brilliantly collaborated venture here! Love the subject and the metaphors, too. Indeed, the world in some areas of life, seems to be "spinning out of control" and at times, it seems to be exacerbated by media and the constant need to bring up things that shouldn't be given credence in the first place. For the grace of God, which has been all but forgotten in the majority, it is our only means of salvation. Obviously, your poem gives much food for thought and so inspiring, too! Thank you for sharing this awesome and cool collaboration! Sheri
ReplyDeleteThank you Sheri and I agree that this world is the only place we have to live, we have never yet placed a community on any other planet. Our world is perfectly suited to us. Rain benefits all nature, cleans away pollution, helps trees, flowers and all sorts of nature in perfect harmony. Trees in turn protect us, shade us, provide us with timber for houses, paper etc. Trees also stop poisons from staying around in the air at night. Not to forget give us oxygen in the day. The world is perfect, everything works; chimes in harmony only Man messes it up. Love Jane
DeleteWhat a brilliant write! Wow...I often think that progress is good, but at what cost? Technology is great, but at what cost? We have lost so much of the 'human' touch in our society...and as we progress, more trees are torn down, nature disappears. Wow. Very powerful poem. Great job. Kristina
ReplyDeleteThank you Kristina! It is sad what we do to our planet but now it is fighting back, earthquakes, tornadoes, extreme weather, sinkholes and yet we still strive to change, probe, delve and gouge out huge holes in it. Stop the madness or the next instinct creature may be Man? Love Jane
DeleteVery thought provoking Jane and Pam with sincerity and concern for our planet Thank you for focusing your poetry on this timely subject. I am curious how you wrote your poem, did you alternate lines or some other sequence? Robert
ReplyDeleteHi Robert, glad you liked the joint poem. I thought of the title and the first line, Pam the second and so forth. The poem, haha, came to life and took over and we marvelled at the way it progressed and were very pleased at the outcome. I blame it all on my muse; the poor old dear drinks too much. :P Love Jane
DeleteJane a Pam your poem is a brilliant collaborative effort. Indeed the "world" seems to be spinning too fast and our need to "slow down and live seems" somehow to elude us. Thank you for a well written poem. Like Robert I too would like to know if you alternated the lines between you.
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thank you Charlene and yes we did alternate lines as that is our favorite way to do joint poetry. I came up with the title and first line, Pam the second and so forth. Love Jane
DeleteOh my! What a wonderfully written poem! This poem is deep in content and rings with truth. What a blessing for you two to write this, Jane and Pam. Even more of a blessing that you shared it with us here at Whispers. That last couple lines, "For once 'torn' out, the next generation will have nothing left to save, And Earth which was so glorious will become our desolate grave!" say so much. Awesome read. Keep up the great work and continued blessings!
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Thank you very much we are very good friends and love to read each others poetic endeavors. One day Pam asked me if we could try a joint or collaborative poem and that sounded like a lot of fun. We have enjoyed this style of poetry and she and I have also asked other poets to try it with us also. It has worked out splendidly. It is amazing how different poets can verge in unity even though they might never have even tried a collaborative poem before. Just think of the immense possibility and the untapped resources to write together about. Why should writing poems be only a solo endeavor? Sharing can be so much fun! Love Jane
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I truly enjoyed your poem. I agree with its message. There is a city not too far from where I live that built huge windmills all over the city a couple years ago. They look kind of creepy to me. I miss driving by and just seeing the once pretty landscape -- now replaced by alien-looking machines! Your poem has a wonderful message and a rhythm that flows beautifully. You can't tell who wrote what. Now that's great writing! By the way, I'm having a poetry contest for rhymers. If interested, visit www.authorsden.com/stacysavage.
Stacy Savage
Pam and Jane -
ReplyDeleteWhat a collaboration! You've blurred the lines of your individual styles and seamlessly written this piece of beauty. My daughter and I were talking about old record albums yesterday. It was so easy - just move the needle from one groove to the next to hear a favorite song. Progress is good, but my head spins out of control too too often. I think you two should make a habit of this joining of talent.
love,
Kathy
Hi Jane and Pam,
ReplyDeleteCongratulations! You have written a wonderful collaborative poem filled with good advice for each of us. This should inspire us to be gentle and caring with Mother Earth...it is the only planet that is perfect for us. We've taken so much for our comfort, we need to give back.
Love, Audrey
Thank you, Jack Horne, for the following comment--
ReplyDeletebeautiful thought-provoking write
Wonderfully collaborated work.
ReplyDeleteTo all of you wonderful readers and commenters that enjoyed our joint endevour and I or Pam have not yet answered and thanked you for your wonderful and encouraging comments. I thank you now and apologize at being so tardy. I have been feeling poorly for a few months but that has passed and I am feeling much better! So I will once again be commenting and praising other wonderful poems and poets. Love Jane
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