Wednesday, January 20, 2016

WHISPERS’ JANUARY SPECIAL ACTIVITY--FORM--TIEN

Dear Whispers’ Friends,

It is a pleasure to share with you the first activity of 2016 hosted by Brian Strand.  It was a pleasure to read the TIEN poems he selected for publication.  The TIEN form is a one liner of ten, one syllable words, with no title.

Thank you to all the contributors and especially, Brian, for sharing these enjoyable poems for us to read.  Please take time to comment and thank Brian for her hard work on this.  If you missed the deadline, feel free to share TIEN poems in the comments section.

Happy writing!

Karen O’Leary
Whispers’ Editor
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Keep still, my heart, just let each day go by.

My life will not hold all there is to love.

By Jim Teeters
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Climb steps, two at a time to save some time.

Stand, and wait for me near this old gum tree.

By Suzanne Delaney
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To write is a gift that God gives to me.

By David Fox
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Love scars, old pain, but fresh blood tears still fall.

Brisk sky, blue eyes, fresh food for my heart’s dreams.

By Victoria Anderson-Throop    
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I bid the night bye, and greet dawn with joy.

The Moon will be a close friend for a tune.

By Ken Allan Dronsfield
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The Moon looks to me, if I own the Sun

By Joyraj Deb
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I rode my horse in a field of soft grass.

Love--at times you have it, at times you don't.

By Barbara Tate
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The young colt was caught but, kept a free soul.

The wild Wolf howled at the moon, a sad sound.

By Shirley Smothers
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In my pruned tree, I saw a nest of twigs.

I gave back his lost ball; bounce of a child!

By Ralph Stott
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The pale moon sings of the spring's sun in fall 

The sign said to walk the rope bridge bare feet

By Sheikha A. 
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A wren, small brown bird, sings joy dawn to dusk. 

When I broke the cup you made, my heart ached. 

By Elizabeth Howard
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day cries fine drops of mist wait to be whole

Night I dream see dawn' s light with my third eye

Mike Bayles
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the joy of words shared with friends--a great gift

By Karen O'Leary
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If days are full of tears, hours will be years

Is a vow a vow, or just words for now

By Brian Strand
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24 comments:

  1. WOW, very thrilling! A new form to explore...

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    1. Dear Raveesh,

      It is fun to try new things--keeps writing fresher that way. Thank you for stopping by to comment.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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    2. Ditto Raveesh. I can't wait until I have a few idle hours to play with this. Is the form Brian's original creation or can he cite the originator?

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    3. Tien is my label for a one liner form of ten syllables, it was inspired by the notable Charles Tichborne's famous 'Elegy 'a complete poem of monsyllables.( this is similar situation to my 'footle' I labelled and promoted (of a few years back now) which was inspired by the famous anonymous trochiac FLEAS Adam/'ad 'em) and my variation on the monoku ,'the broken monoku'ie breaking a one line haiku at the caesura(pause)into two .My other created short forms are the tercet PS(perfect six)six syllables1,2,3with integral title and Septimal tercet of seven syllables,with integral title, 3,3,1.


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    4. I have also labelled and promted many other short verse forms 'after' the style of originators of a particular format many of which are contained in my recent kindle ebook 'BREVE'

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  2. These are beautiful! Thank you all, and thank you Brian for hosting! - Laura M Kaminski

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    1. Dear Laura,

      Thank you for your kind words. Brian did a great job with this activity. I appreciate all the contributors that took part in making this an enjoyable reading experience for you.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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    2. Thank you Laura for your kind words, it is always great to help others be a blessing here on Whispers

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  3. A beautiful variety, that is at the heart of Whispers. Thank you Brian, for coxing it out of us! Ralph.

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    1. Thanks Ralph I especially liked the haiku flavour of your first tien rgds Brian

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    2. Dear Ralph,

      You are so good at concise verse. Thank you for sharing your creative TIENs for this activity. I appreciate all you do for our Whispers' community.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  4. Well done to everyone who tried my 'tien ' form, not the easiest , but probably not as difficult as a 'verbless' poem or the plus1(snowball).(For those interested in short forms my latest kindle ebook (on Amazon) BREVE has 100 poems from my anthology, in 66 poetic forms). regards Brian

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  5. Also my personal thanks to my long-time poetic friend and peer poet for her tireless efforts with Whispers that has enabled me to pursue my inclination for short form poetry in the various activity challenges here over the psst year.Keep up the good work Karen.regards Brian

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    1. Wow Brian! Thank you for these lovely words today. Yes, we've shared a lot in our years as writers and friends. Thank you so much for your willingness be an activity editor, giving us fun challenges to stretch and grow. Thank you so much.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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    1. You have hit the nail on the head Ananya, the beauty lies in it being just one short line.Thank you.

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    2. Dear Ananya,

      Thank you so much for your kind words. I hope you will participate in these activities in the months to come.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  7. Wow! What a nice turnout and wonderful composite of works from everyone. What a joy it is to not only read and enjoy these wonderful works, but to see the amount of participation is even more astounding. Thanks for sharing, everyone. Thanks to the host (Brian) and the creator of Whispers (Karen). Continued blessings to you all! -MJ

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    1. No problem Maurice it is a pleasure to see others be so creative with this simple form.rgds Brian

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    2. Here is a Tien that you might like to consider for use on your site Maurice...We all, may find the Son to light our way

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    3. Dear Maurice,

      You are always so good about encouraging others, my friend. Thank you for your lovely thoughts today. Continued blessings to you, too.

      Karen

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  8. Hello Brian. Thank you so much for the Tien. It will be published at the To God be the Glory! website for next month. / Thank you, too, Karen. I am glad to be able to be an encouragement to others. -MJ

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