Sunday, August 7, 2016

Special Feature Collaborative Poem--By ayaz daryl nielsen and Peggy Dugan French--United States

Beginnings

By ayaz daryl nielsen and Peggy Dugan French

Under my foot
The snap of a twig

Hollow as the wind
Restlessness
Moves me forward

Every curve in the trail
A welcome embrace

The day is singing
Come, we’ll cross
Our old boundaries
Exhaling peace

Rejoicing
Our new beginnings

42 comments:

  1. Coming full circle, home awaits. So many adventures to encounter on the way...

    Spectacular Duet.

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    1. thank you, Marianne, you are appreciated. . .

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  3. Beautiful and full of hope! Kudos to the collaborative poets.

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    1. and kudos to you, Neena - you have a good day

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    2. Thank you for your kind words Neena!

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  4. Good job, both of you! Enjoyed reading!

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    1. thanks, Gert! Best to your endeavors -

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    2. Thanks Gert, so glad you enjoyed the piece!

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  5. Nicely done by both poets.
    This speaks to me.
    Thank you.

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    1. Thank you Michael, glad you enjoyed it!

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    2. thank you, Michael, kind words. . .

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  6. A beautiful poem that moves us all to new beginnings.

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  7. It is so rewarding when poems come together. Thank you both for writing and sharing. Beautiful work!!

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    1. thank you, Barbara - our best to you. . .

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    2. Thank you Barbara, glad you enjoyed the piece!

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  8. Peggy and ayaz,
    A wonderful collaboration between the two of you.
    ~Davidf

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  9. Well done to you both, the sentiment and image captures the moments beautifully.
    Take care
    Annie

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  10. Very nice poetic piece, ayaz and Peggy. I enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing and continued blessings!

    -MJ (www.tgbtgpublictions.com)

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  11. Beautiful work ayaz and Peggy. It flows one to the other and I enjoy re-reading it. Gives me peace. Thank you for sharing.

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  12. Thank you for your kind words Jo, have been enjoying your work in other journals. Cheers.

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  13. Dear Peggy and ayaz,

    Congratulations on all the comments on your wonderful poem. I am so glad you decided to share it here, at Whispers, for others to enjoy. Wishing you, both, ongoing success with your writing.

    Blessings,
    Karen

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    1. Thanks Karen! Thanks for publishing the piece as well. Cheers! Peggy

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    2. thank you, and may Whispers continue to thrive and nourish!

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  14. Thank you, Isha, for the following--

    From restlessness to peace. This lovely poem shows with clarity the changing aspects of the mind.

    Yours sincerely,
    Isha Wagner

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  15. From a tragedy in

    "Under my foot
    The snap of a twig"

    to moving on in

    "Hollow as the wind
    Restlessness
    Moves me forward"

    to a new start in

    "Every curve in the trail
    A welcome embrace"

    to rediscovered hope in

    "The day is singing
    Come, we’ll cross
    Our old boundaries
    Exhaling peace"

    to culminating in joy in

    "Rejoicing
    Our new beginnings"

    this sequence works likes the movements of a symphony. Renku-esque in execution, it is short but nevertheless speaks of many emotions, and the white spaces in between add a lot of texture.

    Thank you for this.

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