Domestic Scene
by the alley
paint bare and splintered
this leaning green fence
inside safe in their garden
two old women chattering
David Austin is professional violinist and teacher, who communicates through poetry. He has played with the Cincinnati Symphony, taught at Colorado College and various public schools. He is a published author, who has been writing poetry and novels for over 40 years. His pride and joy is a shelter in which he feeds and cares for animals. David is a member of Poetry Soup.
Your poem is a wonderful "word art folk painting" and the imagery is perfect and perfectly clear. You've taken what perhaps might have been considered a humble and boring routine and have successfully highlighted with words " folk art" - Sheri
ReplyDeleteI could well envision these scene. I could also imagine the happy talk the two old women were having about the lovely flowers in the garden. It brought joy to my heart. Thank you for a well written poem. I loved it.
ReplyDeleteCharlene
Dear Daver, How ironic that Sandra and I just finished reading a book called "Two Old Women." You paint a touching portrait of women enjoying each other's company, even as the fence needs repair. As we get older, such things seem trivial. It is the companionship we cherish most. Love it and love you, my friend. Carolyn
ReplyDeleteShort but sweet, loved the visuals well done. best wishes. Peter Dome.
ReplyDeleteDear Daver,
ReplyDeleteLoved the imagery in your poem as you describe the two women enjoying each others company. Great visual! As Sheri said " word art folk painting" really defines this poem.
Thanks for sharing your work with us,
Sandra Stefanowich
Thank you, Robert Dufresne, for the following comment--
ReplyDeleteJust as soon as I started reading this one Daver.. your little movie started in my head. I gotta admit... I wasn't thinking flower talk. heh heh ..more like gossip. thanks for the free video Daver. I've missed you my friend. long time since Poetry soup God bless
Bob D
Tis still a good one Daver, my friend. After reading Bob's comment, I wonder if the fence is leaning in to eavesdrop.
ReplyDeletelove,
Kathy
Thank you, Jack Horne, for the following comment--
ReplyDeletevery much enjoyed this tender scene
Hi David. Beautiful, relational poem. I really enjoyed it. Continued blessings!
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