Wednesday, March 5, 2014

Special Feature Collaborative Poem--By Beth Winchcombe and Jack Horne--England

Weather Beaten

By Beth Winchcombe and Jack Horne

Storm clouds gathered
long before the parting
of the ways!
Grief sets in later!
Those tears I shed,
our love long dead.
Had I ever REALLY known HIM -
or just the facade he’d erected ?
I wonder whether cloud nine
will ever become mine?
Bright as a morning sunrise.
Fresh as morning dew.
That’s how I thought of you!
Floods of tears
through stormy years,
like metal turns to rust;
ashes turned to dust.
Weather changes by the hour.
Arc of a rainbow forms a shower.

First, lightning sparks of cruel words,
then came the floods of tears.
The icy silence, chilly glares
and gloomy jealous fears.
The sunny days, when love was young,
became a howling storm.
Her face a frozen mask of hate,
when once her smile was warm.
I thought the love she felt for me
was like a summer day:
the bluest sky without a cloud,
but now the sky is grey.
Her heart a waste of arctic snow,
my words will never thaw.
The love we had is hail and sleet
and perished in the squall.

13 comments:

  1. Thank you, Andrea Dietrich, for the following comment--

    I love reading poems by Jack, and though I don't know Beth, I think she did a wonderful job alongside Jack writing this poem.

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    1. A beautiful piece. l particularly found the following lines impressive:
      "I wonder whether cloud nine
      will ever become mine?"

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  2. Great collaborative, Beth and Jack! Isn't it amazing how all of nature serves as a grand metaphor to life and that human life reciprocates! Your poem is clever and creative. Your poem offers great imagery and depth. You two give collaborative a brand new meaning of excellence! Sheri

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    1. Interesting how the one poet, Beth, renders up a softness and tender heart heart by a love lost and Jack hammers her for not being the love he envisioned. So true to life. I have never met a divorced couple who saw the split through the same eyes. Excellent collaborative poem. Robert

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  3. This IS a wonderful collaboration; very sad, but so intensely emotional and true. You both had me captivated from the first lines.

    Pam

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  4. Thank you, Sara Kendrick, for the following comment--

    I enjoyed reading this one filled with emotion...

    Sara

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  5. Jack and Beth, you both did a magnificent job of writing a very emotional poem. I could picture very well, the looks on the faces of each participant as well as feel the emotions of both. A very well written poem. Thank you for sharing your talents,
    Charlene

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  6. Dear Beth and Jack,

    When people only present a "facade," we never get to know who they really are. Very powerful poem, my friends. I think you hit a bullseye in describing these types of people.

    Love,
    Carolyn

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  7. Dear Beth and Jack,
    This is a beautiful collaboration, full of emotions and feeling. Thank you.

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  8. Dear Jack and Beth,

    You guys did a great job on this co-write the emotional imagery you describe is amazing. Hearfelt and full of emotion you can feel for these people. Thanks for sharing and keep up the great writing!

    Love Sandra

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  9. Thank you, Jack and Beth, for another spectacular collaboration. I love the way both parts of the poem hint back to each other. You compliment each other so well. A joy to read. Thanks for sharing.

    -Maurice J. Reynolds, Owner / Editor
    TGBTG! Publications / Creative Inspirations
    www/tgbtgpublictions.com

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  10. Thank you, Jack Horne, for the following comment--

    could you also post my thanks to people for their kind comments on my co write with Beth?

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  11. Jack and Beth, your wonderful heartfelt composition of chosen words creates deep emotion in this poetic piece. Blessings, Leokadia

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