Monday, April 10, 2017

Spring Hop--By Michael Escoubas and Karen O’Leary, United States

Spring Hop
By Michael Escoubas and Karen O’Leary, United States

be bop
do op

he dips
she slips

rock's beat
moves feet

hips sway
all day

slow dance
romance

45 comments:

  1. These words take one instantly into the world of movement making one feel like dancing madly. Perhaps by sunlight or perhaps by moonlight.

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    1. Dear Isha,
      I really enjoyed this. Karen is teaching me about simplicity in poetry--less is more!
      Thank you for your comment.
      Michael

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    2. Dear Isha and Michael,

      Yes, simplicity allows readers to sit back and enjoy. Poetry of depth and insight gives others a way to enter into poetry. It's in the balance that we find the gift of words.
      Isha, thank you for your kind words on Michael's and my poem. It was a joy writing with him.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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    1. Dear Neil,
      Indeed, when poetry ceases to be fun I'm done!
      Blessings,
      Michael

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    2. Dear Neil,

      Thank you for allowing Michael and me to bring you some fun. It was a joy to write with him.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  3. Nice poem you two. While I was reading the words, imaginary
    music entered my head tuning into the words I was
    reading. Cheers for Spring Hop
    Yancy

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    1. Hi Yancy,
      Karen has great ideas for themes that "work." This simple poem covers lots of ground--music, imagery, action and fun.
      Thank you,
      Michael

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    2. What amazes me is how few words it takes to get reader
      emotions to tune in and carny on in the flow.
      I believe it is great demonstration of
      what is and what can be done.
      Yancy

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    3. Dear Yancy and Michael,

      Thank you so much for your kind words and for all you do to encourage others at Whispers. May you both find joy in your writing.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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    4. It must needs be Karen,
      Love, attention, caring, and kindness
      is what Whispers is all about.
      Yancy

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  4. Great and so funny, dear Karen and Michael! Yes, those were the times of Rock and Roll and Blues. I remember once when we went to a Jazz concert with Duke Ellington and Ella Fitzgerald in Frankfurt/Main - it was their last concert there. Both are yet in my memory! And in Friedberg (Hesse) - Elvis was stationed there, we visited the museum with many exhibits.

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    1. Dear Gert,
      You are so right! I like the latitude we enjoy at Whispers to do a variety of artistic things. With you all the way about Elvis. He continues to be a favorite with me.
      Michael

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    2. Dear Gert and Michael,

      Sometimes, it's nice to just write something fun. Glad you thought our collab. was funny, Gert. I want Whispers to welcome a variety of styles and views. May you both enjoy the talent God gave you.

      Many Blessings,
      Karen

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  5. Really enjoyed this! I can just see them dancing and relate to the "she slips."

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    1. HI Barbara,
      Abraham Lincoln once said to Mary Todd, "I want to dance with you in the worst way." That is what he did, too. I'm like that when it comes to dancing--I just shuffle around trying not to slip, trying not to be noticed.
      Blessings,
      Michael

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    2. Dear Barbara,

      I've always loved to dance but there seems to be less and less opportunities as live bands were replaced with karaoke machines. Can't dance when the singer can sing. Ha! Ha! Thank you for your kind words.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  6. Excelent work you two, I loved this fun pice with great imagery, I hope we see more of your work here. Thanks for sharing!

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    1. It is always nice hearing from you, Peggy. This piece has been all about the fun we often overlook as we remember years ago.
      Michael

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    2. Dear Peggy,

      Thank you so much for your joy-filled words. You are such a light at Whispers and in the writing community as a whole. Wishing you the best always.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  7. this fun piece had me smiling : )

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    1. Dear Jack,
      I think smiles is the common denominator for this poem!
      Michael

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    2. Dear Jack,

      Glad you enjoyed our collaborative poem. Michael was a joy to write with.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  8. Why should poetry be complicated. Every time I read a poem and I have to look up half the words in the dictionary, I lose interest.
    Less is more, this poem proves it my dear editors
    ☺ Inge

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    1. Dear Inge,
      Wouldn't it be nice if writing could be captured in 1-syllable words!! Karen gets the credit--she possesses an uncanny sense of what will work.
      Michael

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    2. Dear Inge,

      You make a valid point. Poetry is an art of communication--one shouldn't have to work so hard to enjoy it. I am on middle ground here as one or two new words expand horizons but when it gets excessive, I lose interest too. Thank you for your thoughts.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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    3. Dear Michael,

      You bring up an interesting challenge. One syllable lines--wow--that would be hard to pull off. Then you have challenged us before. It would have to be something that flows and still has a goal/message. This short verse gal doesn't know how this could be pulled off in a cohesive poem. Thanks for giving me some thoughts to ponder.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  9. Totally cute, fun, and energizing. Thanks for jazzing up my day:-)

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    1. Dear Molly,
      To tell the truth I'm a bit surprised at the enthusiasm this poem has generated, but 100% grateful. Thanks for taking the time to comment.
      Michael

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  10. That Poem was really neat & hip!

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    1. Thank you J T
      Appreciate the comment.
      Michael

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  11. Michael,
    This poem is light, fun and airy. Keep up with these simple., yet still deep poems.
    Your friend,
    David Fox

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    1. Dear David,
      I like the fact that poetry makes possible such a wide range of expression with no one expression as necessarily dominate over the others.
      Blessings,
      Michael

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  12. What a celebration as you move across the dance floor--full of energy and great spirit.
    Wonderful job Michael and Karen.

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    1. Dear Jo
      I can't remember a more fun thing!
      Blessings,
      Michael

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    2. Dear Mary Jo and Michael,

      What beacons you both are in the writing community. Michael, I agree with you about this being fun. Mary Jo, thank you for your lovely thoughts.

      Blessings to both of you,
      Karen

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  13. Hi Karen and Michael
    This poem will keep me smiling all day! Simplicity, meaningful and fun - thank you
    Annie

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    1. Dear Annie,
      It's that source of instantaneous happiness that appeals to me when I engage my pen and apply it to my journal.
      Blessings,
      Michael

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    2. Dear Annie,

      Thank you for your lovely words on the Partners in Poetry poem. Simplicity often conveys a light-hearted feel but is not limited to this thought. Glad Michael and I kept you smiling. It was a joy to work with him.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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  14. Truly enjoyed this witty string of footles, Karen and Michael. You two collaborate well together! Regards & Happy Easter. // paul

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    1. Dear Paul,

      Thank you so much. It was a pleasure to collaborate with Michael on this poem. I hope you had a Happy Easter, my friend.

      Blessings,
      Karen

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    2. Hi Paul,
      With a great co-write partner even an average dancer looks good!
      Thank you,
      Michael

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  15. Loved it. I had to smile. A great collaboration Karen and Micael. Thank you for sharing your amazing talents.
    Love, Charlene

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    1. Dear Charlene,

      Thank you so much for your kind words. What a blessing you are to the writing community--lifting others up with your encouragement.

      Best wishes always,
      Karen

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    2. Hi Charlene,
      Poetry is all about the smiles!
      Thank you,
      Michael

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