A.
Michele Leslie, an accomplished writer and editor, generously offered to be the
activity editor for April. She selected
a challenging activity, which was both and interesting and an enjoyable one for
me. I really appreciate all the hard work she put
into this column.
Activity Directions--Select 7-12 poems by an author
you admire. From each of these poems,
select one word that you think would be appropriate for the poem you want to
write. Using one of these words in each line of your poem, write a 7-12 line poem
on any subject.
I
would like to thank Michele for her efforts to bring this wonderful activity
for our readers to enjoy. Her analysis
of the poems is at the end of this column, which enriches the experience. Thank
you, Elizabeth, Raamesh, Kelley and Ralph for sharing your talent for this
activity. Congratulations on your
publication!
--Karen O’Leary, Whispers’
Editor
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
A
Day Written in Blue
What
a precious blue day it was,
the snowbank melting
at last,
blackwater collecting in
puddles.
After
a blue boy fell into a puddle,
he
sat on a mossy hillock to dry
and
to eat honey he found in a hive.
He
tossed stones at a blue donkey
that
was ploughing the garden.
The
donkey chased him through catbriers
to
a silky blue hammock
where
he could look at the blue stars
in
the dappled sky.
Mary Oliver’s
poems: “The Summer Day,” “The Swan,” “At Blackwater Pond,” “The
Kingfisher,” “Moccasin Flowers,” “The Moths,” “Hummingbird Pauses at the
Trumpet Vine,” “The Lark,” “Egrets,” “White Night,” “Last Night the Rain Spoke
to Me,” “Little Owl Who Lives in the Orchard”
By
Elizabeth Howard
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Forgetting
Memories
are often miasmal, putrescent;
a squad-drill of
old complaints marching by
that
you soon wish were etherised, euthanised
lest, despondently,
you are forced to grapple
with
those; the nocturnal sounds of a forest
you
wished you didn’t set foot in; a gambit indeed
that
you played thinking it fashionable at the instant
and
now regretted... indeed with appetites for regret;
meditating on them
there is no shunya, nor do they
let
you be forgetful of them, vicious in the pursuit,
and
no, they don’t digress either to dwell on joy,
no
sir, they're silhouettes that follow, to the grave mud.
Poems from T. S.
Eliot, from http://www.poetry-archive.com/e/eliot_t_s.html and http://www.blackcatpoems.com/e/t_s_eliot.html
“The Hippopotamus”, “Hysteria”, “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock”, “Morning
at the Window”, “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, “Sweeney Among the Nightingales”, “Aunt
Helen”, “The Boston Evening Transcript”, “Burbank With a Baedeker: Bleistein
With a Cigar”, “The Burial of the Dead”, “Conversation Galante”, and “A Cooking
Egg.”
By
Raamesh Gowri Raghavan
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Golden
Glow
In
the charcoal embers
of
illness, satin gifts arrive.
Words
sewn into a quilt,
knotted with
blessings
and
loving wishes.
Sorrows melt as
I read
friendships’ blossoms
and
feel their rainbows.
Underlined
words are from haiku in dandelion seeds by Arvinder Kaur,
pages 18-27.
By
Karen O’Leary
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Owl, lost
Your
face watched me, your eyes of a lonely girl turning away
side
after side, looking over one shoulder then the other
to
draw me from the basin within the tree that hid your children.
When
you left the branch it swayed so little I wondered if I had seen you at all,
then
your gaze locked mine from another part of the forest
tearing my gaze again
from the dark eyes of your young ones.
Now
your tree seems empty, its opening a mouth twisted in a laugh,
the
autumn leaves covering that mouth like the palms of a hundred
hands.
No
young ones, no bones or ruffled snags of fur fallen beneath
your ledge.
Nothing
but sanddust and darkness.
I
want to see you. I want to hear you calling in the night. That silken whisper.
Even
if it is not me you call. Even if it is me, and the night grows short.
I learned of
Shakila Azizzada from the website http://www.napowrimo.net/ which
has been featuring a poet in translation along with daily ‘prompts’ for poems during
national poetry month. It was a double challenge of sorts! Reading the
beautiful poems of this poet and then turning a few words into my own little
effort. I do hope that the style of the poems reflects her style just a little.
. .I intend to read more of her work and find inspiration! The poems were
translated by Mimi Khalvati & Zuzanna Olszerska
By
Kelley White
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
The
Churchwarden
(St James’,
Cooling Kent)
All
around, death imbued him to his bones:
From
his mother’s headstone
And
in the gloaming, his sisters, resting side by side.
What
phantom, sails this windswept marshland,
Through
distant landscapes, and shifting sand?
There!
a convict ship moors, full of those with troubled souls.
Within
the deepening sounds of evensong,
And
under crimson skies, he still tends and longs;
But
death has claimed him:
By
the whispers of angels, when they sing,
There
to abide by his side, these stone feathers as wings.
Wilfred Owen
1893-1918 “Bones”, “Miners”, “Mothers”, “The Letter Gloaming”, “The Unreturning
Phantom”, “Six O’clock in Princess Street Landscapes”, The One Remains
Troubled”, “Asleep
Deepening”, “The Show Crimson”, “Conscious Death”, “The Next War
Whispers”, “All
Sounds Have Been of Music Feathers” and “To the Bitter Sweet-heart”
(Charles Dickens
used St James’ church, for a passage in Great Expectations, when young ‘Pip’
met the convict Magwich.)
By
Ralph Stott
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Although
I only received five poems for this activities exercise, they were, each of
them, substantial, and, I thought, well-written (whether by craft or
inspiration I cannot always tell).
One
of the themes of the poems (the poems influenced by T.S. Eliot, Shakila
Azizzada, and Wilfred Owens), was a kind of deathlike despondency. In the poem
“Forgetting,” the vocabulary sprung from “miasmal” and “nocturnal” to
“silhouettes that follow, to the grave mud.” The ambience was, then, maintained
very well by a varied and select vocabulary. As the author indicates, “there is
no” digression for joy. Not being able to forget unpleasant memories is also
part of what Eliot is about.
The
poem, “Owl, lost,” also exerts a kind of despondent ambience, with an added
intensity of emotion, and a concluding death metaphor, which is most effective.
In “The Churchwarden,” a sense of mystery exists because we cannot tell,
really, whether the main character in the poem is actually dead, or if, rather,
he is just obsessive about the graveyard. This mystery is even more effective
because of the precise nature of the words the author chose to use—for example,
what could be more tangible than a headstone? Crimson skies? Stone feathers?
The
last two poems done of this exercise are more on a happy note. “Golden Glow” is
the perfect title for Karen’s “satin gifts” in the “charcoal embers of
illness.” The reader can almost see the sorrows melt from the page as the poem
concludes with “blossoms” and “rainbows.” Elizabeth Howard’s poem continues
with an allusion to melting, and “the blue stars/in the dappled sky” bring to
mind the Biblical reference to the apple of God’s eye. We can conclude that
these poems, skillfully wrought, using some of the same vocabulary as the
better known poets from whom they chose their vocabulary, tended to purvey a
similar ambience, while, each of them, developing into a very original work of
art.
--A.
Michele Leslie, Whispers’ April Activity
Editor
I enjoyed each installment, fine poems all, and equally the keen insight in Michele's overview.
ReplyDeleteDear Michael,
DeleteThank you for your kind words about the poetry and your thoughts. Michele did a great job with these poems and her analysis of the poems.
Blessings,
Karen
I certainly agree they are fine poems. Thanks, Michael, for your response.
DeleteMichele,
ReplyDeleteThese poem are great, each poet did a fantastic job!
Your new friend,
David Fox
Dear David,
DeleteYes, Michele did a wonderful job with this column. She is a talented writer and editor. I think Ralph, Kelley, Elizabeth and Raamesh each shared rich reading experiences. Thank you for stopping by to share your thoughts.
Blessings,
Karen
Hi, David! They did a fantastic job. I appreciate your looking at our activity.
DeleteThank you Michele for the powerful composition of great poetry!
ReplyDeleteYours,
Gert Knop
Dear Gert,
DeleteAmen! You said it all. Michele did a great job as poetry editor for April. Thank you for stopping by to share your encouraging words.
Blessings,
Karen
Thanks, Gert, for looking at these great poems!
DeleteWell done on such an interesting exercise. It does inspire and I believe it could be repeated in the coming years. Thanks to everyone for their efforts.
ReplyDeleteDear Annie,
DeleteI found it a growing experience. Michele did a great job coming up with something different for us to try. Thank you to Michele and all the contributors. I'm glad you enjoyed reading this, Annie. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Blessings,
Karen
Glad you found the exercise interesting! I was surprised how many interesting views could come out of it, and how varied they were. Thanks for taking the time to read it.
DeleteCongratulations poets. A. Michelle Leslie and Karen O'Leary, thank you for making this activity possible. I certainly enjoyed reading the material from the participants. It was unique and inspiring. Thank you all for sharing and continued blessings!
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Dear Maurice,
DeleteThank you for your encouraging words. I'm glad you enjoyed this column and Michele's efforts putting it together. I appreciate all the contributors that joined in this enriching exercise.
Blessings,
Karen
I agree a great undertaking by the poet's involved
DeleteThanks, John, for commenting. I think the poets did a great job!
DeleteDear John,
ReplyDeleteYes it is, thanks to Michele's efforts. Thank you for your kind words.
Blessings,
Karen
Dear Karen, I am so touched and feel honoured that you have created such a wonderful ' golden glow ' with words from ' dandelion seeds ' how thoughtful ! Thanks once again. Much love , arvinder
ReplyDeleteArvinder, I am looking forward to seeing the work referred to! Thank you for your comments.
DeleteDear Arvinder,
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for your kind words. dandelion seeds is a wonderful book. Wishing you the best with it!!
Blessings,
Karen
Dear Poet-Readers, I greatly appreciate all your kind words, and I am happy if this exercise brought any new insights and/or enjoyment to you. I could not get here as soon as I hoped, due to some other responsibilities. I was very much impressed with how quickly these poets wrote their poems! I think we should repeat the exercise sometimes--with, perhaps, a more spiritual focus this time (keeping the same rules). For example, poems about harmony, using the vocabulary from a favourite poet. Something like this might in some ways even prove easier. (Most poets know more about harmony than rules, don't we?)
ReplyDeleteDear Michele,
DeleteYou did such a wonderful job with this activity. Thank you for your insightful comments on the poetry you chose for publication. I'm grateful to have mine among them. I really appreciate all your hard work on this column.
Blessings and Best wishes,
Karen
Dear Karen, Thanks so much for this wonderful opportunity! I hope I am able to spend much more time perusing the work on this community website, which is such a blessing and delight to all of us!
DeleteI had tremendous fun doing this activity, and even more so reading the poems here.
ReplyDeleteDear Raamesh,
DeleteThank you for sharing your artistic and creative poem for this column. I'm glad you had fun with this activity; I did, too. I appreciate all you do for our poetry community.
Blessings,
Karen
I had a lot of fun too! When I received your entry, Raamesh, which is the first one I got, I knew right away the activity would be a success for us!
DeleteThanks!
Thank you to everyone who contributed a poem. A most clever way to really get into a poet's work, Ms. Leslie, and then make something new from that.
ReplyDeleteDear Mary Jo,
DeleteThank you so much for your insightful thoughts on Michele's activity. It was a fun and new way to approach the writing experience for me. I appreciate all the work Michele put into this and glad you enjoyed it.
Blessings,
Karen
Thanks, Jo, for reading these. We all appreciate the attention all the readers like yourself brought to the poems!
Deletewell done to all - very interesting project
ReplyDeleteThanks for reading, Jack!
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